According to the Business Writing Center (1997), passive voice is when the writer does not specify who is acting and active voice is when the person acting is clear. To me, this seemed simple. Question one I found to be very easy, however the other questions were a bit tricky in particular question three. The original sentence was:
If you have questions, I can be reached at 712 288-1144.
The answer was:
If you have questions, call me at 712 288-1144. ~ OR ~ Call me at 712 288-1142 if you have questions.
To me, this sounds exactly the same so I was still very confused with how it changed from passive to active voice. However, all the other questions I got correct.
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| Source: Mobieg, 2015 |
Reviewing two examples of curation
Content curation is very important in delivering meaningful messages to an audience (Whitaker, Ramsey & Smith, 2012). Curation is not about creating new content but instead, bringing together and compiling the most relevant information for the audience. Meaningful curation is a very important skill of media writing in today's age because of the amount of information and data available via the internet. Curation makes sure that the messages are representative of brands and are tailored to the needs of the audience (Whitaker, Ramsey & Smith, 2012).
Below I have compared and contrasted two websites on how they have used curation.
Trip Advisor
This website depicts the information to be very data driven, clear and direct. The presentation of this site is purposely curated to deliver to the audience brief and good reviews of hotels all around the world. The difference in presenting the information this way means that audiences and readers of the website, are getting only the important and essential information about the hotel. Viewers or readers of the site only receive pure reviews on the hotels listed and not an overly articulated description.
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| The number one hotel in the world in the Maldives! Source: Tripadvisor, 2015 |
Conde Nast Traveller
The information shown on this website is descriptive and generous. In direct contrast to the Trip Advisor website, information is curated on this site thoughtfully to offer readers an immersive sense of what staying in these hotels would actually be like. More than just factually driven reviews, this site brings the hotels to life through very vivid descriptions, giving the audience of feel of what staying in these places would actually be like. The attraction to readers is then a full review that goes far over the basic details, giving a deeper and enriched vision of what these hotels have to offer.
Reviewing peer's Storify submission
Below is my review that I sent to Stephanie Christensen. This is the link to her submission.
"Steph, you have done a really good job on your news article!
Who do you think is the audience? It is evident that the audience are people that have been effected by suicide and mental health. I can imagine all the people who attended will have their own story in regards to why they are at the event and as a result, raising awareness and money!
What did you learn about the event? That teams walked up and down Castle Hill repetitively for 24 hours! I’ve only been to townsville a few times and I know that this hill (to me at least) is so big! Good on them!
What else (if anything) could be included that would make the story more interesting or have more impact? I noticed you have only included one quote. To make the article more interesting, it would have been good to add in maybe another two quotes perhaps from the event coordinator and a witness of the event (not a participant, but just someone watching the event)
If the structure is confusing, how could it be important? I don’t think the structure is confusing at all. The article flows very nicely and is easy to read :) The only small structural I can think of is that your quote should be indirect, direct, direct. Hope that makes sense :)
Well done and I hope I have helped somehow!"
References:
Business Writing Center 1997, Passive and Active Voice, viewed 9 September 2015, http://www.businesswriting.com/tests/activepassive.htm
Mobieg 2015, Quizzes, digital image, viewed 9 September 2015, www.mobieg.co.za
Trip Advisor 2015, Gilli Lankanfushi Maldives, digital image, viewed 9 September 2015, http://www.tripadvisor.com.au/TravelersChoice-Hotels-g1
Whitaker, R, Ramsey, J & Smith, R 2012, Media Writing: Print, Broadcast and Public Relations, Routledge, New York.
Mobieg 2015, Quizzes, digital image, viewed 9 September 2015, www.mobieg.co.za
Trip Advisor 2015, Gilli Lankanfushi Maldives, digital image, viewed 9 September 2015, http://www.tripadvisor.com.au/TravelersChoice-Hotels-g1
Whitaker, R, Ramsey, J & Smith, R 2012, Media Writing: Print, Broadcast and Public Relations, Routledge, New York.
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ReplyDeleteI agree with your comments on the travel sites wholeheartedly, the way you structured your review of them was very professional, and I wish I could write that good. I found no grammatical errors in your review, plus it was informative and well structured.
ReplyDeleteI agree with your comments on the travel sites wholeheartedly, the way you structured your review of them was very professional, and I wish I could write that good. I found no grammatical errors in your review, plus it was informative and well structured.
ReplyDeleteAnother fantastic post! I found no grammatical errors in your writing and it was very well structured and informative. I like the images you have included. Have you referenced the CN Traveler website? I can't see it anywhere. Keep up the good work, you are almost finished! :)
ReplyDeleteGreat job Yas!! I love your review if the curation of the two travelling agency's. I would say just look at sentence structure. Great review of the storify too, :)
ReplyDeleteI have found no mistakes in your review and I agree with your assessment wholeheartedly. We are in the home stretch now, only one post to go!
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